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Wednesday, 3 June 2015

4/6/2015 JEB speedwrite:Stars a mystery of the universe

NAME:Johan DATE: 4/6/2015


SPEEDWRITE: INFORMATION REPORT ON STARS

Today’s learning focus- WALT to write an information report on stars in 40 minutes.




My Information Report Success Criteria:
Self
Peer
My heading/title:


  • is an interesting title (I might have phrased the title as a question.)


My opening paragraph/introduction:


  • says what my report is about in a clear way


  • gives a general “classification” – and maybe a technical classification


  • outlines the main features of the subject


My main paragraphs/body paragraphs:


  • have clear topic sentences  (topic and main point)


  • are organised so that each paragraph is about a different aspect of the subject


  • give detailed information (factual descriptions)


  • include specific, technical vocabulary


  • are generally balanced (have a similar amount of detail about the different aspects I write about)


  • may have helpful: tables, pictures and/or diagrams to add information


My end paragraph/conclusion:


  • draws the report together/sums up my main points


  • may give a personal opinion; ask the reader a question and/or tell the reader where further information may be found












Begin Writing Here:

Stars of mystery of the universe


[Introduction]
Stars,if you want to know how they're born how they live and what happens to them when they die.You'll enjoy and I hope this encourages you to make your own explanation everyone



What are stars made of.

Stars are made with a mixture of hydrogen and helium this would usually caused nuclear fusion because of the extreme gravitational pressure on the star . On the inside of a star hydrogen and helium smash into each other this causes nuclear fusion . As a side effect of this we get heat and light although this is a good thing we also get solar radiation that can cause skin cancer that would greatly affect the human races numbers .
[the life cycle of a star]
The life cycle of stars very complex. The birth of a star goes exactly like the proceeding, helium hydrogen and dust come together and create a gravitational pull then what happens is the hydrogen and helium bash into each other creating solar radiation in other words nuclear fusion side effect as we already know is light,heat and the bad side effect is that it can cause skin cancer.After that after that the star could live up to 100 billion years before it's inevitable death this is called a Nova or for a larger star super nova  
[ types of stars ]
There different types of stars the differences are colors shapes and sizes for instance colors are most obvious for a blue star is always the hottest and oldest for a blue flame is the point where metal melts . A red star is a cold a star and they have found that some stars are the body heat of a human which is about 30 to 40 degrees Fahrenheit strange isn't it. Although a star like our Sun which is a yellowish orange is a medium star and is by far the largest object in our solar system



[Conclusion]
Stars are strange and we need to use that power( I got that power!) . Stars could be different from us they usually are there actually probably one way that they could be the same but temperature but that's not very often can we do to make big stars like usstars of the great mysteries of the universe

3 comments:

  1. Kia ora Johan,

    Well done on completing your speedwrite within the 40 minutes.

    Your next learning steps are:
    1) Most of your information report was well written using voice recognition but you still need to proofread to further improve your work - there were a lot of small errors there that were not edited at all.

    2) Make sure you use correct punctuation - if voice recognition doesn't pick it up, you have to go back and edit your work so that there are no punctuation or spelling errors, or even double ups of words.

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  2. Talofa Johan,
    How are you liking speech to text for your writing?

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  3. Hi Johan,
    Nice to see that your writing is so good and to see that your caching up or maybe you all ready cached up.
    But did you type it or did you speak it.
    From Peter.

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