MARS THE DEAD PLANET

MARS THE DEAD PLANET

In Week 5 of Term 2 our class focussed on how to write great information reports.

We wrote about the planet Mars as we are in the middle of learning about Planet Earth and Beyond. Learning how to write a great information report will help us with our self-guided topics in a few weeks time.

Here is my writing, after I have self-assessed and peer-assessed my work.

Did you notice the planet mars? it is earth’s neighbours and is surprisingly different and Named after the roman god of war. if you want to know more,like why mars is red or how old you would be on mars read on.

visual surface

Mars has a very strange surface and is filled with crazy things.Mars is red that seems simple right,nope its surface actually has a mineral the name of which is iron oxide.The red planet has a thin atmosphere which is letting too much sun light in scorching the barren wasteland.covering most of the planet Sand Storms can rage lasting for months

Mars also has one gem in all the volcanoes,sand storms and canyons it has mount olympus(or olympus mons) the largest volcano known to man.But the planet has two ice poles like earth.

14/05/15

My Reflection: (e.g. what I learnt, what I thought about my work, what helped me improve.. the thing that made me improve the most is that i wrote faster but the problem was that it was hard to find “inspiration” and the topic was about some thing I know little about.

Human exploration

mars has never been explored with a real human,it has only been explored with drones or satellites.

The Orbit of Mars

Even though Mars is our closest neighbour, its orbit is very different. A Martian day (or how long it takes to rotate once on its axis) is longer than an Earth day and equals 24 hours and 37 minutes. This is because it spins slower than our planet. Moreover, a year on Mars is the same as 687 Earth days! Imagine if you lived on Mars, you would be almost half the age you were on Earth!

(Shared writing with teacher and group 19/05/15)

My Information Report Success Criteria:	Self	Peer
My heading:
is an interesting title (I might have phrased the title as a question.)
My opening paragraph:
says what my report is about in a clear way
gives a general “classification” – and maybe a technical classification
outlines the main features of the subject
My main paragraphs:
have sub-headings where helpful
have clear topic sentences  (topic and main point)
are organised so that each paragraph is about a different aspect of the subject
give detailed information (factual descriptions)
include specific, technical vocabulary
are generally balanced (have a similar amount of detail about the different aspects I write about)
may have helpful: tables, pictures and/or diagrams to add information
My end paragraph:
draws the report together/sums up my main points
may give a personal opinion; ask the reader a question and/or tell the reader where further information may be found